Improve your grammar. I's are always capitalised, and you only need one exclamation point/question mark per sentence.

For example, ending a sentence with one question mark, one exclamation point, or one of each is acceptable as long as it used correctly (IE don't do something such as put an exclamation mark at the end of a question). However, ending a sentence with more than one of each is not acceptable. Remember, it's either one or none!

There are also several comma errors.

I suggest running this through a spellchecker.

Overall, I'd say this is pretty mediocre.

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