Okay, good, but you forgot to describe what Dark Matter is to me, and changing it into "normal matter" is rather vague too. What kind of matter are we talking about here?
You also forgot to fix up the things I mentioned about all his Lycan forms. Read it again and do that.
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Attack #2: Kuro Anaboko Jigen= Black Hole: I create dimensional inconsistencies that can be used to move my attacks from place to place with out losing speed or power- used in Shikai more powerful in Bankai. I can create up to 5 black hole while in Shikai stae and up to 10 un Bankai State. However I can only use this power 4 times in a fight regardless of how many black holes I choose to make.
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Again, put a comma after "Shikai" and before "more." And fix the other words in bold.
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One is that if someones I can see is doing the Carameldansen dance my soul burn with terrible agony and I am incapacitated.
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What
is the Carameldansen dance?
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While in this form I have an aversion to sunlight and my vision is narrowed the same as it is in one of my lycan forms.
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So he has an aversion to sunlight, is that because it harms him in some way?