It was funny, I'll give you that!
Good:
Good jobs on the close ups and different backgrounds! It's very obvious to me that you know what you're doing, you're very good at it! With the majority of comics here, all you get is the same background over and over, same panel size, and no close ups. This single comic completely blows them out of the water and shows that sprite comics can
not suck. In that regard, this is one of the best comics I've seen around here for a long long while! Well done! ^_^
Bad:
Though your skills soar in the department of panels and graphics, your typography is seriously lacking. In all but a few balloons, you did a very poor job with the text. It feels to me like you made the balloons first, then tried to fill them. That's a good way to set yourself up for either A) crammed text that looks very poor, B) Little text in a large balloon, and/or C) Balloons that leave huge bare spots in some areas (like "Wait, no! That's a different story..."). I'm sorry to say it, but this comic has all three in aces.
Let me give you some tips which should help you in that regard.
1. Make sure you type out what you want the text to say first, THEN form word balloons AROUND them.
2. If you run into hairy situations where the balloon seems to big and covers everything, try a rounded-corners box instead. They work very well when used sparingly.
3. ALWAYS type your text in the CENTER format. It looks much more clean and professional. PLUS, text looks a million times nicer inside the word balloons! Give it a try, you'll love it!
I'll leave you with THREE BONUS TIPS from yours truly:
1. Comics look much more professional and neat when you type everything IN ALL CAPS. Don't ask me why, it just does.
2. "Since the TV won't work" in the seventh panel could have been handled a whole lot better. See all that space in the balloon? Well, the guy is obviously shouting, so why don't you
enlarge the text to emphasize his point? That would really help in filling the bubble while making your comic all the more interesting of a read.
3. You went through the effort of making the first three panels very neat looking, but you made the rest of the comic suffer because of it. What I mean by that is, it looks like you put time and effort into the first two, using neat effects and such, but seems as if you rushed through the rest of the comic. Time is effort. Remember that.
There are simple, yet VERY effective remedies for this:
A. In the fourth and fifth panels (with the sprites standing and floating), they look like they were cheaply pasted against a background canvas. Like they don't belong. You can easily remedy this, yet
add so much more dimension if you simple give your sprites shadows.
B. With the T.V. going pfft, try adding some kind of onomatopoeia (sound effect) like "KSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSHH!" or add some 8-bit Theatre humor by saying "*White Noise*" or something (but if you do that, you need to keep the "*White Noise*" deal consistent but smaller in size throughout the last two panels). That way, you emphasize the fact that it was the television that messed up the story.
When all is said and done, I really enjoyed this comic. You made a good effort in showing that sprite comics don't suck. It was very refreshing! Please keep in mind the tips I have given you, and you'll make your future comics all the better!
Also, I am a graphics teacher that is setting up to teach beginners and advanced (and everything in between) classes for sprite comics. If you're interested, please let me know!
Keep up the good work, and I'll watch your career with great interest! ^_^