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Old 05-20-2008, 12:30 PM
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Re: (Act/drama) Legend of Zelda: Land of Hope

I really like the story so far, Tazryl. I did notice a few mistakes though but no big deal.^_^

Like this first one, you have the words "saw" and "gazed" in this sentence, all that needs to be done is to take saw out, that way it just "he gazed at the sight".
Quote:
Link sighed as he saw gazed at the sight of the endless ocean.
Here, it;s like a whole sentence is missing after the word "She".
Quote:
]"Princess is to feminine for my liking, I want to be called Tetra." She
"Don’t see why not. Zelda is a great name."
And here, I think the "y" was skipped in the "might Hero" part, my keyboard skips letters alot so it's possible that that's what happened there.
Quote:
"Why? Am I disturbing the might Hero of Winds?"
But like I said, it's little stuff so no big deal, I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

Good Luck!
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