First off... reading dark blue on a even darker background is just painful. Had to switch my color scheme to just read it. Now the screen is to birght.
Secondly, I think Link should talk. Unless this Fanfic was created for the purpose of mocking Link's silence. Its up to you whether or not he talks or not. I just think he should talk. Another annoying thing is Collin's attitude, completely unlike that of the game. This is another thing that is up to, but as a fan of Collin I detest this change.
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Link simply shook his head as he jump attacked the dummy's head, bursting the pumpkin replaced as a head.
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Well I suppose there might not be anything wrong with it. I think it could be stronger if you said.
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Link simply shook his head as he jump attacked the dummy, bursting it's pumpkin head.
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Shorter and to the point. *shrugs* well I think its better.
Also Zelda1994, it IS a TP parody.