04-26-2008, 11:26 PM
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This leaves a LOT to be desired. First, put some effort into writing, come up with a way to make this talk show fit the world of the games (I could do that with barely any thought, which shows that you may just have typed up this as some sort of random junk *exaggeration, so don't take this too personally*) and, G-d forbid THINK about what you're writing:
First, If it's a talk show, Ganon would be under preassure to be honest, and he would answer the question.
Second: Ganon isn't a vulgar 20th century teenager, he's a Medieval style villain with senses of pride, honour and dignity (not to mention a vocabulary that is much better than the one you appear to be sporting above). Make him fit his character at least !!!
Third: Come up with jokes that are funny and don't make people groan.
Fourth: DOESN'T YOUR COMPUTER HAVE SPELLCHECK! IF NOT ON THE INTERNET FOR SURE ON MICROSOFT WORD! IT ISN'T SO HARD TO COPY AND PASTE THE WORK FROM THE TEXT BOX TO WORD! G-D FORBID SPENDING A WHOLE AGONIZING, EXCRUCIATING MINUTE-AND-A-HALF CLICKING A BUTTON, CHECKING SOME WORDS TO MAKE IT LOOK LIKE IT'S WRITTEN BY AN AUTHOR WORTH THE WORDS HE TYPES AND PASTING IT BACK ONTO THE TEXT BOX! Sorry for shouting, but as an author of a good fanfiction here, I feel insulted that your grammer is so bad and yet you let that kind of work be posted as a story. People read these. You have the option of the checker. Make USE of it.
Rewrite your talk show well, and all of this critcism will be null and void, and I'll be the one that looks bad for writing this. I'm a very blunt reviewer, so take this seriously, but not too seriously.
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