I suggest telling the..
Antagonist, Reason why they are the antagonist, their emotions involved and links involvement
What Link has to go through to defeat them

ANd in all... make it a little more organized... I'm not a fan of big blocks of texts... though I am a fan of potentially good ideas...

ANd your idea may be a good one...
-Keep in mind though... If you want to write out a story, fan fiction might provide more criticisms that this forum will not... Otherwise... I can't really tell you if I like your idea... just because... I don't have the patience for it...

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