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Originally Posted by Lly
Ugh. I've seen scores of bad parodies on ZU, but this just about takes the cake. Please put more effort and thought into your stories in the future.
It's not funny, it moves way too fast, the jokes are roll-your-eyes predictable. Script-format stories are notorious for their lack of description, but they at least make some degree of sense. This doesb't even have a story- it's like "The Wind Waken in a Nutshell Full of Typos and Crud." It makes no sense at all.
I'd suggest making it longer, making it follow the progression of the story rather than just having sporadic events, and using funny, clever, original jokes. Right now it's just... like, spam.
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I completely agree with Lly. take some time with this thing.
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Originally Posted by Oni_Deity
MoniblinBob: You esta lyoko
MoniblinJoe: You el madre esta dumb
Moniblin Bob: El colde
MoniblinJoe: Esta colde el diablo libro espanol
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were you trying to make your own language there?
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Originally Posted by Oni_Deity
I'm just gonna say this once: I'm ignoring all your critisicim (SP?) so you're just wasting your time. I'm not gonna stop, and whaddaya mean, "predictable?" I make just about everyone look like an idiot in everyway possible. Probably woulda look better if I made Link talk, but I'm gonna avoid that.
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Whoa... relax we're just telling ya what's wrong with your parody so you can improve it, not to piss you off.