Ugh. I've seen scores of bad parodies on ZU, but this just about takes the cake. Please put more effort and thought into your stories in the future.

It's not funny, it moves way too fast, the jokes are roll-your-eyes predictable. Script-format stories are notorious for their lack of description, but they at least make some degree of sense. This doesb't even have a story- it's like "The Wind Waken in a Nutshell Full of Typos and Crud." It makes no sense at all.

I'd suggest making it longer, making it follow the progression of the story rather than just having sporadic events, and using funny, clever, original jokes. Right now it's just... like, spam.

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