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Old 04-19-2008, 03:58 PM
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Re: REALLY short Zelda Parody. What really happened.

Ummm... I'm sorry, but this... isn't so great.

The main problem here is that you're trying to squeeze to much into such a short chapter. This causes 1) The parody to feel rushed, and 2) You don't really have any space for jokes.

Also, the title of the chapter has no relevance to the events of the chapter.

What I reccomend that you do is to rewrite this. Make it longer, slow it down, and add more jokes.

If you want inspiration, check out Grass's parody, Yottobyte's parody, or Jaca's parody. Just don't steal their jokes.
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