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SonicTheLegend · #23 [ ] 04-17-2008, 06:02 PM

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Originally Posted by Twilightwolf64

Oh my god. As the son of an author, I feel obligated to address the fatal flaws of this "novel", for the sake of good writing.

1. uze a speelchekor!11!
2. Aren't novels supposed to be longer than two and a half pages?
3. Chapter titles use colons, not commas.
4. I was hard-pressed to find any coherent sentences.
4.5. Actually, there were a lot of run-on sentences.
5. The plot makes no sense at all.
6. Every (Good) author knows to use paragraphs.
7. My dog puts more thought into what he does on the lawn than you put into your "novel"

Now, if you don't mind, I refuse to let this document taint my computer any longer.

For crying out, it's just PART of the book nimrod! Thanks though, if you read the whole story it'll make a little more sense. I can make some of those corrections without any trouble. But I'm not changing the story any more than I have. And first off here's a few things you need to know about FAN fictions.
1:Fan fics are made by different fans, so there's bound to be someone who hates the story.
2:If you don't care for it then don't bother checking back. Listen, if you check the little sample from my OTHER topic this one is much better.
I've put a lot of thought into this story for your imformation, it's called thinking "outside the box" and I like thinking WAY outside. It's my way of keeping things fresh and fun. (For ME, not you!) The only reason I even put this thing on the net was cause I felt like expressing myself! I can make a few simple changes, it won't take but a minute. And I forgot to use spell-checker tonight. Some of these words need to be added to the dictionary. (like Ganondorf for instance) But still, if you don't have anything "nice" to say about my work then don't bother saying it. It's like watching a new show too, you have to watch for more than just five freaking seconds before you figure anything out!
Some say arrogant, but I'm just defending my work. Something true artists do. I am not going to make any changes to the story but I can and will make the other changes you mentioned when I find the time. Right now I'd like to get the story done.

It's not that I don't like your opinion, but I just don't like to be made aware of mistakes someone has ALREADY made me aware of!
On another note, if you read the first one and compare it to this one it's a lot less confusing. Even if it is still a little confusing. Geese, you think people would want something new for a change.