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Old 04-16-2008, 10:08 PM
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Re: [Zorolo]:Molly Thatcher's Education

A few minor mistakes, very good I must say xD

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Originally Posted by Notsil
"We are Tattle an-
I spy with my little eye a lack of an ending quotation.

Quote:
Originally Posted by Notsil
Molly interrupted, "You have no body!",* she hissed, too scared to speak louder than a whisper.
This comma should not be there.

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Originally Posted by Still Notsil -_-
The girl giggled while the boy sighed apathetically.* "Do not worry about that, you will soon fine things much harder to believe than this. Now, as we were saying, we are-"
This is a repated mistake I noticed a few times when reading over your assignment. This period here should be a comma as it is leading into the quote. Find all the times you made this mistake, and fix them all.

Fis those and post here, or in the homeroom and your next assignment shall be up. ALSO I have a reading assignment for you, and that is to read "Knockin' on Heaven's Door," I would like you to read it ALL, and continue to keep up reading it until it is finished. Since this will be a long reading assignment it will most likely be the only one you have, so you're lucky.

Done, you happy now?
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