I actually erred in regards to the punctuation - I should have used semicolons throughout that list, since I did intend to distinguish between the machine and the man who awakened it, and Joseph Crown. My intention was betrayed by a comma. And a lack of the word "and", xD

But to your story.

We have ourselves a demon hunter, of sorts, and a haunted man at that. I assumed, at the introduction of the Dreamtime Corpses, that their blight was a first-time occurence, but the appearance - and more importantly, the reactions - of Puzzler seem to indicate that he and the Corpses have already been acquainted. What is his history, regarding these creatures? Even more: are the Corpses responsible for the fact Veretchin is a diseased ruin? (Questions to keep my reader's suspense boiling, and my mind eager for the next chapter, =D) I'm also curious as to the significance of Puzzler's name. It seems a name to bear some significance, being without precedence (as far as I can tell) up to this point.

My favourite line, from the battle between Puzzler and the Corpses, was, "It dived backwards off the building. The man laughed and followed." It paints such a vivid image, concise line that it is. And I love the daring - the death-defiance - that it shows Puzzler to possess.

I am very interested in watching how you tie together the various characters so far introduced.

Until the next chapter, then. =)
Selah