You said you edited, but even when reading through just the first paragraph, I can see most of the errors I pointed out are still present. You still have the run-ons and clause problems I asked you to fix (and you should have mentioned that "travelled" and "travelling" with two "l"s is the British spelling--remember that I'm American and don't always know that. <___<;; ) You have to make the edits I asked for before we move on--otherwise you're defeating the whole purpose of this.
These are some of the problems that still remain in that first paragraph alone:
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Walfrid examined his surroundings, he was surprised at how far he had travelled in one short day.
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A strange woman outside of the inn had tried to sell him a horse but he had refused, he always travelled on his own, he didn’t even trust an innocent horse to travel with him, he felt that it would let him down somehow, the only person he could trust was himself.
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He heard birds singing softly in the distance and he stopped and listened for a few moments, he had learned to appreciate the small things in life, as he hadn’t had much to appreciate since his Father died.
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I already pointed out what was wrong with these quoted lines in my post above. If you need suggestions or help with fixing them, let me know, but don't just shrug them off.