Lly, I thank you for your kind words and I appreciate the input. Yes, I tend tend to fly through my writing pretty quickly, leaving spot-check editing for very last (or I make my wife do it
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As far as punctuation and other shtuff is concerned, I pretty much taught myself how to write over the past few months so I am still learning and have plenty of room for improvement. I've considered taking some college-level writing courses, as I haven't been in school for a good seven years now, but just haven't been able to push myself through the door. Truly, if you ever want to see something really scary, you should check out some of my older works on my myspace *cringe*
P.S. Oh yes, I almost forgot! This story is my attempt to downsize my writing into more digestible blocks. My previous attempt, an epic 500+ page fantasy novel, was so overwhelming with information that even I couldn't keep track of it all and the story was going nowhere because of it. I'm glad to hear that this is passable!
Thanks again!