Daaaaaaaaaaaaaamn.

This story is stellar, and I might even go as far as to say that this is one of the best fanfictions I've read in this site quite a while. Your punctuation and grammar are occasionally a little spotty- I've noticed you tend to forget commas and randomly capitalize words that shouldn't be- but that can be fixed with editing. Your narrative is rich, your descriptions are vivid. You introduce new ideas without overwhelming the reader. Your action scenes are nice, and cntrary to what others said- I found it very easy to follow.

Overall: creative, interesting, just needs a bit more editing. But really, I'm hooked! Keep up the fantastic work! :3

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