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Originally Posted by link14
the reason I did not but "my breath" instead of it, is because it was implied. I was hardly breathing, because it was taken away. Just letting you in on my thinking :]
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I understood what you meant, I was pointing out a grammatical detail. usually we only use the word "it" if we've already said what "it" is, in this case, the "it" is your breath. but you never said your breath, you said "hardly breathing" in which breathing is a verb, not a noun....
but really- I don't need to pointout grammatical errors in a poem. your thread IS called poems from the heart, not grammatically accurate poetry
her poem is cute. definately can get a sense of her personality (in comparison to your style).
*aaawwwwww* cody and kaela how cute- sounding
