Thanks for the replies! I agree, Mental Images seems to be the best of the lot. I also agree that the others are not quite that good. As for the shorter ones, well... I guess its like you set, its personal what you make of them.

And now... my new poem:

"As solid as a Crack in a Seashell"

With a fell slash we are Corrupted,
Sickening, ticking like a bomb,
Calm-like,
Waiting for the burst of personal Apocalypse.

I feel like Death,
Scraped Hollow on the inside,
With a touch of torture,
But, like always, mingled with Numb.

Now the Hate and Anger are Fearless,
It flows through the veins of our conscious,
But, still, it remains Static, slumbering, defiling our thoughts,
A seed of Sorrow, sprouting little pains...

A heart-beat, ka-dum, faster, ka-dum, ka-dum,
I am suffocating, the feel of vomiting,
Vomiting what is Left of me,
Leaving the Corpse without the Brain.

That's me, that's us.

Tell me what you think,

Have nice day,

Sander K.

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Many Thanks for the Siggy and Avy V99!