All I need you to do is expand the bio. In two sentences, you for from "Nafien De'Voirig was born in...", to, "When he was forty...". That's a little too big a gap for meaningless memories, don't you think? Friends? Family?

At the end--he uses his skills as a mercenary, but does he have any goals? Any dreams?

Let me know when it's been bolstered a little. ^__^

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