Odd, to say the least. I was unaware that the Dome welcomed guests. Your writing requires work on the dialog portions, as you do very little with them. I'd advise adding into the depth of what the character is saying by describing the emotions going through the words. You cannot simply assume you can write what they say and expect the entire message to be conveyed. Description goes beyond the area the post is in.

Assignment Time!

What's this? A voice. Stumble back to your feet, and attempt to enter once more, where you will find a happy little ghost called a Domerii welcoming you in a rather loud fashion. Don't worry, it's simply excited to see you. Because of its happy appearance, it just wants to show you around the Dome. Follow it, you have nothing to fear, to the library. I expect you to expand your dialog skills.

500 words. Mush!

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