About seven or Eight comma mistakes. Much better though.

*Approves*

You need to do your reading before you do this next assignment, as the place White is entering just happens to be the place I described in that post.

Also.

ASSIGNMENT TIME!

Have white enter the room I described in that post, if you have any questions about it PM me. I want him to wander around a little bit untill he finds Tsuukai Sitting on a throne made out of that black goop on the ceiling. Have Tsuukai say something about testing white, and end the post with Ghostly Figures Emerging from the blackness. No word count, but I am expecting a good description of the Throne, and room in general.