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Originally Posted by MrRandom
Alright, I think I've covered everything. Doing heavy descriptive passages is still new to me, but hopefully it will become second nature soon enough. I've noticed that I'm a bit comma-happy as well...I'll have to try to avoid that.
One last thing : how come you didn't think I'd look at the reading?
EDIT : Oh yeah, arcane. Wiktionary definition. Is often used to refer to magic or spellcraft-related stuff, though that isn't listed there. |
Yeah you'll get used to it over time. I'm a little comma happy too sometimes. YAY COMMAS...>_>
I just expected people would be like me, and skip over it due to lazyness. Good to know your a harder worked then me ^_^
*Reads over* Good. *Stamps with approval*
Also I didn't mention this before but I liked how you got them guys to the dome, very imaginative.
ASSIGNMENT TIME!
Ok Have White awake in a hallway in the dome with a student looking over him. I need you to write two good sized paragraphs minimum describing this character. Then have the two venture off to find Tsuukai's Room(Tsuukai will be your teacher). Have them discuss how the dome works, and end it with them finding the door, the student leaving and a ghastly voice coming from the other side of the door saying "I've been waiting for you, White" or something like that.
Edit: Tsuukai's Profile can be found
Here