A little better.
The problem is, if you're gonna have guest appearances like Mario and Luigi, you should make them actually have some importance.
for instance, Mario and Luigi could BE the curse. Ganondorf could've used them to annoy/harm/attack/curse/whatever the Deku Tree or something. Or you could've saved the MArio/Luigi jokes for Hyrule Castle [since you can see them in the window]
And if I were you, I wouldn't use words like 'retard'. Can be found pretty offensive by some people.

Anyway, you're getting better, but put a little more thought into your jokes, and make the chapters longer. It's hard to develop good jokes when the chapters are so short.
Also, I'd have a little less of the 'Me:' in the parody. It's funny, but already starting to get over used in just 2 short chapters o.0

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