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Old 02-01-2008, 12:37 PM
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Re: Maloe, the princess fairy.

Very nice, definitely one of the more original characters I've read. It's all good, except for some spelling/wrong word mistakes. For example:

"...Maloe (as small as she is) is not a force to be reckoned with..."

I think you meant "...Maloe is a force to be reckoned with..."?

Give it another read-through and fix those mistakes, and then it's approved.

And one more thing, lightyears measure distance, not time. Maybe you could just leave it as years or centuries instead?
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