Uh...okay. First off, a serious grammar and spelling check is in order. Go back and review this piece and see if you can find the flaws in the grammar and spelling, like missing punctuation and things like that. Oh, and..
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“yes, how did you figure that out”
“I have my sources” he replied “ I have a way to get to the dome safely and quickly”
“You do?”
“Yes, But I want one thing from you.”
“What is it?”
“ To survive, there are too few people alive that think as you do.”
“ How do you know all of this about me?”
“I have my sources, Which I will not tell.”
“Very well, we shall go”
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You should have an extra space between every time someone speaks. Makes it easier to read.