Alright, all of this is well and good. Upon reviewing this lesson and the one before it, I have noticed that while your telling sentences are very good, you are still falling prey to very simple mistakes.
First of all, thoughts should always be italicized.
Next, you are misspelling a few words. Always run your posts through a spell checker (there are online ones if you don't have Word) before posting.
Try to catch yourself making careless mistakes, such as:
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“Five, four, three, two, and . . . .” Xitra barely ducked an arrow witch flew straight through were his head had been only a few moments before.
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Of course, those bolded words should be "which" and "where."
For this next lesson, I want you to finish the "test" you started, and then have Orysius depart for now. Then, have Xitra find his way (by coincidence, not looking for it) to a door that opens to reveal a giant beach before a seemingly endless ocean. Have Xitra explore it, and then have him find a cave in a coastal cliff. End your post as Xitra enters the cave.