Welcome to the Beginner Class. I have a few things I want you to know.

First off, in Role Playing, we write in the past tense. It's a common mistake among beginners, so don't worry too much about it. Just be sure to write in that tense from now on.

Second, when speaking out of character (as in, you yourself is speaking outside of the post) you want to put "OoC:" and then type what you mean to type. When you wish to go back into the post, write "BiC:". BiC means back in character. Also, on that note, it's generally informal to break character in the middle of a post. At the beginning and/or end is where it is more widely accepted.

Third, your post lacks length and body. This is more or less the most common beginner problem, but it's also one of the more easier ones to remedy. All you have to do to lengthen your post a bit is describe things. Instead of hopping from key point to key point, describe what the area around Benni looks like, what Benni's thinking, or other things similar to that. Anything to fill in the gaps between those key events will help you fill out that post.

So, before you move on to the next lesson, I want you to go back through that post and edit it according to everything I've said above. Let me know when you have done this.

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