Just read the two chapter, and I must say, this parody definately has a lot of potential. If I were two classify the parodies in the forum into two groups, good and bad, this would definately be on the good side.
That whole thing with Bob was very original. Maybe the name wasn't all that original, but still. It's also had its moments which made me laugh real hard, like the blade of grass thing and the overly intelligent cat.
The parody does have its minor problems, though. First of all, the second chapter was WAY too radom. It was really hard to visualize what was going on there. But hey, I have to admit that's my problem too. And you also broke the fourth wall a little too early. I know it's fun breaking the fourth wall, but I think it would've been better if you saved the fourth wall for later. I also encountered a few typos.
I have a suggestion, though. If you want characters to scream at the top of their lungs, just like Fado, you should try and italiscize the dialogue instead of just sticking with caps. It would look best if it was both all caps AND italiscized.
And just a humor suggestion:
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Bob-in-the-sack: One dense broad, isn’t she? *is whacked* Ow!
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I think it would've been funnier if it was
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Bob-in-the-sack: One dense broad, isn't she?
Link: *Whacks Bob*
Bob: *Is whacked* Ow!
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Dunno, it's just another suggestion of mine.