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Originally Posted by Hylian #1
I like it alot. But perhaps it could be broken up a bit. Maybe just split into two paragraphs perhaps.
Your use of the small words like "the" don't really need to be there quite as much but hey, it is great. 8)
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I erased some "the" as you said! Now check it! Im also planing on changins its colors so it fits the theme.