This was worded a bit strangely. It was also a bit bland, mostly because of some confusing diction at the beginning that made me lose interest. You need to grapple your reader so they focus through the entire piece. Other then that, the grammer is very good. Just work on your wording and you'll be fine.

Assignment Time!

Detail is the key as you arrive at the mighty Dome. The Dome is a place of history, where mighty warriors have trained and battles have been fought. As you walk through the hallowed halls of such a place, a Domerii appears to your surprise. This is the personal Domerii to the sensei known only as the Dark Eye, and he is there to inform you that the Dark Eye requests your presence in the library. The Domerii is something like a ghost, and has no real form, and he will vanish after he tells you this message. Find your way into the library.

The object of this assignment is to see how your diction and sentence flows work. 1,000 word minimum.

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