Sorry for taking so long, but here we go:
A small typo here, which I point out to remind you to look out for things like these:
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Rak hoped to find someplace where he could get a good view of the surrounding area to see if he could figure out where he was, but had no suck luck.
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Bolded word should be "such".
Now, a note regarding the content:
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It had been five days since Rak had exited that tunnel and found himself on a mountain. The first two days he wandered around, not knowing where he was. Rak hoped to find someplace where he could get a good view of the surrounding area to see if he could figure out where he was, but had no suck luck. Eventually he gave up, and tried to find a way off of the mountain. On the second day he found what seemed to be a trail. It was very faint and didn’t look well traveled, but it was something, so Rak followed it along the mountain. The following days brought on a cold wind, which didn’t affect him much, but did worry him a little as the cold air could be the onset of a blizzard.
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This whole first paragraph as a whole is sort of bland; guy gets lost, guy tries to get back to where he started. You really hammer the point that he's lost home a lot, and it gets a little redundant. I'd try to add some interest to this paragraph by throwing in some more details, or some thoughts of Rak's (this I really recommend), or some interactions with his environment or maybe some animals on the mountain--
something to make this seem more like a story, and less like a listing of facts. You try this with the last line of the paragraph, mentioning the cold wind, but it's not enough to save the whole thing.
Here would be my quick rewrite of this (forgive me if Rak's character is off, but this isn't meant to be accurate--it's only to show what sort of simple changes could be made):
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It had been five exhausting days since Rak had exited that tunnel and found himself on a mountain. The first two days he had spent wandering around, utterly lost, walking circles around pine trees and gurgling streams that he knew he had passed countless times before. He hoped during that time to find somewhere clear and high where he could get a good view of the surrounding area, and from there, figure out where in blazes he was--but, as usually seemed to be the case in his travels, he had no such luck. Eventually, he was forced to give up, and settled for trying to find a way off of the mountain. Never mind whatever it was he had come here for--after all that wandering around, he could scarcely remember why he came anyway. On the second day of his trip back, he found what seemed to be a trail. It was very faint and didn’t look well traveled, but it was something, so Rak shrugged and followed it along the mountain. The proceeding days brought on a cold wind, but it didn’t affect him much. All it really did was worry him a little, as he knew the cold air could be the onset of a blizzard.
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The rest of the post as a whole has a similar problem (although the last paragraph is a bit better)--if you have trouble figuring out how to fix this, let me know and I can make suggestions or give examples of how to go about this.
Once you've made your edits, let me know and I'll give you your next assignment. The grammar looked all right in this, but I can see we'll need to work on paragraph formatting, so I'm going to hold off on assigning you to one of my characters for the moment so that I can assess your skills a bit more before deciding. ^^;;