
01-01-2008, 05:48 PM
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Re: Tania Yumi
Alright. Check this for consistency on female pronouns (she rather than he, her rather than him) and for the spelling of "talisman." Also, for a six year old, she has far too many things at her disposal that are useful in combat, especially since there are no explanations for how she got them anywhere in this thread. Explain that, first, and then make sure that it's noted that once you use one of the talismans, it is gone. Paper burns.
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