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Originally Posted by Malo and Talo
He sometimes didn't feel like White though, with the not caring whether the puppy got shot or not. But it was funny and somebody had to say it, so it's okay.
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he didnt care about the dog because he saw the "made in china" tag so he knew it wasnt real. and now for my review...
so your not happy with this chapter Grass? well at least smile with the reviews. Anyways, here is my review on chapter chapter sixty: the water temple part IV-morpha, what a waste
Jokes: The jokes in this chapter had me laughing loud enough for my neighbors to hear! Everything about it was hilarious. I don’t know if everyone agrees, I think the Riddleman was on his best in this chapter. He made me laugh before, but he had me rolling on the floor this time with the water gun and the stuffed animal. 5/5
Entertainment: This chapter was entertaining all the way, it was very well written, and it was so damn funny! Man, once again you left me with not much to say. I mean, what else can I say? 6/6
Grammar: like MNT said, these are easy points. There were no mistakes at all(as far as I could see). 3/3
Plot: I loved the surprising twist you put in there! For a moment I could’ve swear the figure clad in black was Black, but it was Ruto the retard (ex retard). That was unexpected. 6/6
Overall: 20/20 = +A (100%) Perfect score!
So you still not happy with this chapter... that's great! it means you can still do better than this. i dont think you arent happy with it. it was just one of the surprising twits wasnt it? you said you werent happy with it so we wouldnt expect much and we would set lower standars for it and be in for a surprise. its either that or I'm being a bit paranoic
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