Two very strong chapters, once again.

Chapter 58: Transdimensional Turds

What I liked: the Strong Iron Bars (love the way inanimate objects talk in your parody), Dark Yellow, White and Navi being 'turds', Navi's 'weak spot' being the HSM soundtrack (which my sister is obsessed with), Epona being hilarious as usual, the reused cliffhanger, the reverse psycology, 'Uh, I’m the title of the chapter, buddy. You can’t tell me what to do'.
What I didn't like: the battle with the dark Links felt rushed, and the 'opposite personalities' stuff was a bit cliché, imho
What you should improve on: maybe Navi's characterisation?
Other comments: how many items does Yellow have now, compared to the others?
Score: 4/5 Excellent chapter

Chapter 59: Uncertain Death

What I liked: the certain death, 'Look! A chest!', Yellow conversation with Certain Death, the Riddleman cliffhanger, the boss key chest, yellow grappling teh Scarecrow Slaves's face, Black getting rudely cut off by the chapter.
What I didn't like: nothing much
What you should improve on: can't really think of anything
Other comments: it would be funny if Yellow, White and Navi end up making friends with Mr. Nobel Prize winner, only for Black to show up and hate him, and then him getting tragically killed in the boss battle. Maybe for the final dungeon you could do an epic of ten or so chapters?

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