
09-09-2007, 01:08 AM
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Her Smexiness :3
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Location: Alchemilla Hospital, Silent Hill
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Re: shiko moon
Okay, first off, I would like you to explain what a Zeloc is. At least, if that race is any different from a human.
Next, you need to expand his personality and biography slightly. They need to have a bit more detail.
Finally, sentences begin with a capital letter and end with a punctuation mark. Please, put his Appearance and Personality sections into complete sentences and correct most of the grammical errors. It would help to put Shiko's profile through a word processor like Microsoft Word. It can find most of the spelling and grammical errors and help you correct them.
Alright, work on that and I'll take another look at him.
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