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Originally Posted by Hërŏ
Hey, not bad but it could use a bit more detail especially in the action scenes. Most importantly however this piece seems rushed, I noticed many spelling mistakes throughout, considering this wasn't a very long chapter I strongly advise you to quickly proof-read it before finally posting it.
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I'm sorry if you think it's rushed. I'm not really creative with fight scenes anymore. And yes, I know I make spelling errors. The longer the post, the more errors I'm likely to make, so either don't complain about a few errors, or don't call them short.
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