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Ants the size of teacups,
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"Ants" was in the middle of a sentence, so it doesn't need a capital "a."
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Abruptly the light’s haste stopped, and light merged with shadow, forming a tall, towering figure.
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You don't need the comma. In a case like this, you would put a comma before "and" only if it precedes an independent clause (a full thought, basically). For example, if you were to say, "My friend Brian stopped by, and I was very happy to see him."
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He was verging on bald, and had a light tan.
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Same thing here.
Also, you might want to try using italics to identify direct thought.
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He must have jumped at the chance to assassinate me. He thought, slightly amusing himself.
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It really works in the same way as dialog. The underlined sentence would be written in italics and the "h" would become lowercase. The italics aren't necessary, but they do really help.
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and you have even shamed Hell.” The Angel replied, sending a ball of light alongside his words, which narrowly missed Kraton.
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When dialog is followed by a phrase that qualifies it, the dialog ends in a comma and the first letter in the following phrase is lowercase. So the period would be a comma and the "t" would be lowercase.
It was very good. Now, do you know if you want to participate in the group assignment. Unfortunately, there might not be much choice, but I want to know how many people would be opposed to the idea.
Also, which character would you like as a teacher?