Originally Posted by Pàxèn

Well there are a few typos to start, not thats any real problem man. Everyone does and its ridiculous to expect a person not too when typing for a long time.

Going to take it paragraph by paragraph.

In the second line you use the word sky twice, when read it doesn't flow. Replace the second sky with 'mass' or something to that effect. Infact the first paragraph doesn't flow very well at all. Not trying to be offensive here but from a readers perspective it is very fragmented.

First line has a few typos but it fine other than that. However the second line seems like something you shoved in and once again its fragmented. Not that I am in any form to write but something like this may work better.

"The lord sat at his throne awaiting a visit from one of his many messengers. The room was filled with a foreboding and its vast size did nothing to allieviate the constant tension, the only reprieve was through the single arched window."

Now I would love to continue but I am being called away.