Not bad for a starting character. There are a few things I would like for you to add on, though.

First, you need to expand her appearance section. Mainly you need to describe what her armor looks like other than that it has metal wings.

Second, her personality is a little short. Not all teenagers act quite alike. Does she get after anyone that teases her or does she sometimes understand that they are just doing it for fun? What about other beings that aren't human? Does she get along well with them or is she only comfortable around Blade? A couple more sentences would be good in this area.

Okay, expand those two areas and I'll take another look at her.

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