Rika Kaza Oni

Name: Rika kaza Oni, both personalities will answer to this name.
Personality one likes to be called Ume.
Personality two likes to be called Youko.

Age:14

Race: Half-Demon

Sex: Female

Hair: Long black hair that comes down to her waist. Her black hair has a shine to it when it is out in the sun. It flows and moves along with her body too perfect to be normal human hair. It is always straight and has never curled up for any reason at all. If one saw her hair move in battle they would think it was a live.

Eyes: Royal Blue

Weight: 135 lbs

Height: 4’ 8”

Weapon: A Wakizashi that has an Infinity Symbol on the blade. The hilt and sheath are both made out of wood. The word Oni is engraved onto the hilt of the wakizashi. The sheath of the wakizashi has her family bloodline Symbol called the Blood Bat. Its a black bat with large wings.

Armor: None

Strength for Ume: Ume is faster than most normal humans because she is a half demon. She can see hidden magical sources and sometimes she is able to control them. For this reason she is able to control the wind to the point of being able to do amazing things with it. She is good at hand to hand combat and she has created her own style of fighting by using the wind to increase her speed and movements in the air. She can transform into her demon form to amp up her speed and strength. She’s very comfortable with this fighting style that she has made up.

Weakness for Ume: Being only fourteen, she isn’t very strong. She has no armor, so her only defense is her speed and her wakizashi. She's small, so she can't hit tall people in the head that easy. She weapon is small so that mean she has to come in close no matter what to attack her foe. This means that if they happen to be a lot more skilled then her it could get her into trouble When she transforms, she loses control of herself and Youko takes over.

Strength for Youko: She has no problem using the wind to fly in the air and using it to stop herself when being hit. She can change the wind resistance to make herself faster and the other person slower.

Weakness for Youko: This form is weak in hand to hand combat, so uses the Wakizashi for offense and defense is her only choice. She doesn’t know how to use the new style of fighting, and therefore doesn‘t try. She still is not that strong, but is more powerful than Ume.

Skill/Magic: She calls her way of fighting, Aero fighting. In Aero fighting, she uses her abilities to control wind to fight. By doing this, she can make herself faster at running and fighting. She can make herself change directions in mid air so as not to fall the wrong way and break a bone. She can slow herself down when falling and this helps her make more attacks before landing. Only Ume knows how this fighting style work.

Skill that she can do while using Aero fighting style:

Air Shield: It’s a massive sphere of wind that constantly spirals chaotically. Air shield can catch and/or defect most projectiles. Air shield can also deflect weak sword swings.

Slip Stream: Takes away the air resistance from anything that she wants, including herself and others. By taking away the air resistance, you can move twice your normal speed.

Transforming her Wakizashi: To transform the Wakizashi blade to a blade very much like the Tachi, two things must happen. First, only Youko knows about the Wakizashi's ability to transform, therefore, only she can transform it. Second, she must call out the Infinity Symbol's name, which is Riko.

Ume Appearance: She wears a silk dress that is white and ends at her knees. There is a pink, wavy wide line that goes around the bottom of her dress. The sleeves are long and covers her hands and are also loose, so as to not to get in the way of her fighting. She wears a pair of white shoes that are worn away. So, they are perfect for kicking and running around in. She wears white silk gloves on her hands. Her skin is a very light brown, so light that it is hard to tell if it is not just dirt.

Demon form/Youko‘s appearance: Her body turns dark blue and her eye’s are green. A little red tail appears from under her dress. Her teeth become vampiric like fangs.

Ume Personality: She's a nice, kind person that gets along with most people. She doesn’t like to fight all that much but she will if needed. Most of the time she has one thing on her mind and that is finding her brother, Umi Oni. Most of the time, you can see her with a small female elf with wings by her side.

Youko's Personality: She loves to fight anyone that is in her way. While fighting, she feels like she is in a state of ecstasy and the only thing she can do is destroy anything and everything that gets it her way. She also likes to play around with the person that she's about to leave in a bloody mess. She does not get along with any race at all and thinks she will be the ultimate ruler of the world.

Biography: Rika was born of a demon mother and a human father after her brother, Umi Oni, killed his father. Her mother ran from hell upon her husbands death and took a human form amd found a husband that would take care of her better then her old husband.

At the age of five, while at school, some of her classmates started to beat on her for being kind to everyone she ever met and for having better clothes then them. While the girls where kicking and yelling, “Hey little princess, your parents aren’t here to save you. Why don’t you die and save us the trouble?” Then they kicked her into the wall that was close to her.

“No! I can’t die. It’s not fair that I have to die. Why don’t you like me? Why, what did I d-!” she yelled. Then got kick in the gut by the girls again. One of the female teachers seen this out the window and knew of her mother's dark back-round and went to call her to get her daughter. While the kids kept beating down on Rika, she started to feel something she could not help but like. She grabbed her head and started to shake it violently against the wall. “No! No! This feels to good to stop. What is happening to me? Oh my, this... This feeling is great. Yes, I’m finally free of that little girl.” Her body turned all blue and her teeth grew to fangs. All the girls started to run away from her when Rika's mother appeared.

“Rika! What are you doing? Calm down right now. Don’t let your power take you over.”

“I don’t like that name. I never liked that name and my power is not taking control of me, it can’t. Mostly since I have always had control, but I still sleep when you are around because you protect this girl.” Her body transformed back to normal and she fell to the ground.

“Rika! Rika, you have two personalities? How did that happen and why did it show up now?” Her mother looked up and saw the whole school in front of her. “I’m sorry, but I will keep her home from now on. Thank you for teaching her.”

Six years after that day, she transformed into her demon form and her other personality was born. She had been training to control her demon powers that she doesn’t fully understand. Her mother told her to go find her brother so he could teach her about her demon powers. She left to find her brother at the age of 11 and on her way she found a little elf female elf named Arika.

Two years after that, she came into a city and lost herself and killed almost everyone there. The next day, she found out her demon form was wanted for $1000 alive. She has been very careful of who she talks to and what she does around other people.

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On her away to try and find her brother she met a odd fencer. Bored at the time she grabbed his letter and made him chase after her out of the city. Later what ended up as a game turned into a fight for information about her brother. Rika end up thinking she won the fight, but learned little about what happen with her brother. She also seemed to agree to help the fencer she come to know as Zorlo if he ever needed it.

Still trying to find her brother she end up lost in a building or cave like place where she had found copies of herself. It didn’t seem like much until she notice her dear friend Arika had been taken from her. On her way to get her friend back from the people that took her she ran into a mage name Shisho. He helped her rescue Arika and escape from the odd place she found herself to be in.


Name: Arika

Race: Winged Elf

Height: 1 foot

Appearance: Arika is a small, rare Elf that can fly around because of her wings. It’s hard to see her yellow dress, because of the little light that comes off of her body. Her hair is as big as her and is white.

Sex: Female

Age:10

Personality: She seems to always be in a bad mood when someone talks to her. She doesn’t like that the only person that will talk to her is Rika, since she is her only friend, this causes her to follows Rika around. Arika can’t and doesn’t like to fight, so most of the time she runs away when Rika starts to fight. She is a nice Elf, and this would be easier to realize if she wasn't always in a bad mood.

Skill/Magic: None


Role plays:
The Wind, The Sword and The Forgotten. (Nikuvillain)(done)
OPEN and their intentions(Done)
OPEN and the Road to Their Goal(Still going)
Underwater City: Fight for Life and Freedom (Avyuir)(still going)
Drity dealing: A fight to the death? (Beh77)(Still going)

Rika is an interesting character Niku. However, there are a few revisions in order:

- What is a Wakizashi? It's an unfamiliar word, and you should define what it is in the Weapons section.

- Expand Ume’s appearance. Currently, you describe merely what she wears. But what does she look like?

- The naming system is somewhat confusing. The character's name is Rika, but she has two personalities: good (Ume) and bad (Youko)? Where does Rika come in, if that is the case? Is she merely the neutral state between Ume and Youko? Or are Rika and Ume the same?

- The biography needs clarity. For instance, after you had given the history of Rika's mother, you returned to a scene in Rika's life, but rather than say "Rika" early in the paragraph, you continue with the pronoun "she" - thus, the reader does not know if you are referring to the mother or her daughter.

- Regarding Arika - does she have any powers or skills, et cetera? If not, mention that she does not.

Fix those points and I shall return presently to check over it.

Thank you, I try to make all of my character interesting in there only way. I think Nikudemon is my first great exp. Anyway I didn't tell what the Wakizashi looks like because it kind of hard to explain a small weapon like that. So I put a link to wikipedia for both the Wakizashi and the Tachi. I didn't know it was unfamiliar since I love Japanese swords. I also fixed the bio so it says Rika at the start and not the middle.

Arika has no kind of skill for fighting so I did put that. I though putting that she runs most of the time would make you think that. Anyway I fix what you ask so just tell me what else need to be done. Oh and it is nice not hearing the first thing I need to fix is grammar I have to thank my friends for that.

Apologies for the delay in getting to this.

Cheers, a link to Wikipedia. I applaud that. The biography is somewhat clearer, but I went through and found two points that you should fix, to give it optimum clarity:

At the age of five, while at school, some of her classmates...

Replace "her" with Rika's name. Having come directly after a digression on the mother, "her", in reference to the daughter, rouses confusion.

One of the female teachers seen this out the window and knew of her mother's dark back-round and went to call her to get her daughter.

Background.

As for the names: is Ume particularly vital? She and Rika strike me as the same personality. That new explanation after Rika's full name adds to any initial confusion, so I say get rid of it - it doesn't clarify the situation. Here's an idea. Rather than say this:

Name: Rika Kaza Oni, both personality will answer to this name. Rika is a the birth name that she got when is was a baby. The two personality well answer to this if you know it and sometimes well give it out but only to friends to show that they know them. There only name is the names they give out the normal people she doesn't wish to know yet. Rika Kaza Oni is a name that can be said so not to mistake one from the other.
Personality one like to be called: Ume
Personality two like to be called: Youko

... this:

Name: Rika Kaza Oni, both personalities will answer to this name. Rika is the birth name that she got when she was a baby. The two personalities are:
Ume (good)
Youko (demon)

... (or whatever words you wish to use within the parentheses) would be just what this character needs.

Fix or comment, and I will return... quickly, this time. ^^

Originally Posted by Selah

As for the names: is Ume particularly vital? She and Rika strike me as the same personality. That new explanation after Rika's full name adds to any initial confusion, so I say get rid of it - it doesn't clarify the situation. Here's an idea. Rather than say this:

Yeah it's there names that they give out to people they know. and like i said before they like to be call those names. It's part of them as a person to be called that. If you want think of it as a nick name in real life. You get a lot of nick names for diffrent thing you have done. Some good some bad but they are all part of the main set you were in. Oh and I fix the stuff.

Okie-dokie.

--Approved--

Thank you maybe you could have an RP/battle with her one day.